The first chapter isn't badly written and has some good suspense and angst. On the strength of that, I got sucked into an increasingly ludicrous storyline in which there are all these ridiculous angsty flashbacks, Wu Fei gives Duo a fluffy stuffed dragon, all the pilots get magically transformed into toddlers and then back, and then they all retire and Duo takes up quilting and there's an earthquake and he gets impaled on a piece of rebar and that's where I gave up.
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Date: 2012-05-19 06:01 am (UTC)The first chapter isn't badly written and has some good suspense and angst. On the strength of that, I got sucked into an increasingly ludicrous storyline in which there are all these ridiculous angsty flashbacks, Wu Fei gives Duo a fluffy stuffed dragon, all the pilots get magically transformed into toddlers and then back, and then they all retire and Duo takes up quilting and there's an earthquake and he gets impaled on a piece of rebar and that's where I gave up.